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Happy to help (and thanks again on the HEY improvements). Personally I think that you could avoid directly quoting the papers too much. Avoid wording such as "talented athlete" as this would serve to unduly promote the subject. Usage of "glory and fame" without attributing who said it directly in the text also seems to be a bit problematic.
I attributed all the quotes and removed the "talented" phrasing (I think the quotes I have are alright - since it seems 4/5 of the article are not quotes). I also added sections, but there wasn't much about tournaments participated in besides the Olympics, so I did not add a table. I'm removing the promotional tag but feel free to restore it and let me know if you think there's still issues. BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:57, 4 January 2024 (UTC)Reply
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"Negussie was an athlete and was both a sprinter and football player" Is "was an athlete" needed?
Removed.
"being among the first 12 Ethiopian Olympians" What's that mean? Was 1956 the first Olympics with Ethiopians?
Changed; 1956 was Ethiopia's first year at the Olympics.
"last in his heat" Is there a link for that?
Hmmm... I can't find one – thoughts?
Does it say who gifted him an automobile?
All the source says is "The current (1998) marathon record was made by Belayneh Dinsamo, a trainee of Coach Negussie. This long-standing record had earned Coach Negussie a prize of an automobile."
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