Talk:Paul Roach/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 17:13, 7 September 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:13, 7 September 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

• I copyedited the article here. Let me know if you disagree with any of the edits.
• I also archived the references.
• Roach developed a reputation as one of the best "offensive minds" in the NFL and was hired as offensive coordinator by the Green Bay Packers in 1975, the first person ever to hold the position - I am guessing you mean he was he first OC the Packers ever had? If so, clarify that by adding "for the Packers" or something like that to the end.
  • Changed.
• Roach earned all-conference honors in football twice[a] while playing end and in the backfield and was team captain as a senior., if the sources differ on two or three, why not say that in the article? What made you choose "twice"?
  • I might have seen a second source stating he was selected twice, but I can't remember. I just changed it to "two or three times" with a note that sources conflict.
• Ref spot check:
  • Checked #2, 4, 8, 11, 18, 22, 24

Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:53, 13 September 2023 (UTC)

• I've addressed both of the issues, @Gonzo fan2007: BeanieFan11 (talk) 17:59, 13 September 2023 (UTC)
  • Passing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:15, 13 September 2023 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.