Talk:Soviet frigate Rezvyy/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 09:42, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
I will do this one.
Lead
- ...the vessel was designed to operate as an anti-submarine vessel in the Soviet Navy...: vessel is used twice in this sentence, suggest something like "the vessel was designed to operate in an anti-submarine role for the Soviet Navy"
- Good point. Amended.
- with an armament : drop the "an", armament is used in plural form here.
- Fixed.
- After a major repair: repair implies an accident but there is nothing to this effect in the body of the article. Perhaps it an overhaul/refit?
- It looks like a refit.
Design and Development
- Probably isn't one, but may as well check: no link for "N. P. Sobolov"?
- Not yet. That would be an interesting article to research.
- link "dual-role URPK-5": this should be linked here as it is the first mention (it is linked later)
- Moved wikilink.
Construction and career
- Laid down by on 10 December 1973: looks like a missing word or words here "laid down by NAME?"
- Oops.
- Rezvyy, along with many of the class, : suggest "Rezvyy, along with many of the other ships of her class,"
- Good suggestion. Reworded.
- On this trip, Rezvyy, along with the Project 1134A (NATO reporting name 'Kresta II'-class): the Project 1134A/reporting name has already been mentioned in the design and development so it seems repetitive to recite both again.
- Removed.
- Rezvyy was sent to Shipyard No. 35 in Murmansk to be repaired.: as noted above, this seems to imply an accident of some kind so ideally should be explained. However, I wonder if it was actually a refit?
- Looking at the source, it is likely a refit. I have clarified this in the text.
- meant that the Soviet Navy was no more.: seems a little colloquial/informal for an encyclopedia, suggest "meant that the Soviet Navy ceased to exist.
- Happy with the suggestion.
- Rezvyy was transferred to the Russian Navy.: suggest "Rezvyy entered service with the Russian Navy."
- And again.
- Tromsø in the NATO member Norway.: suggest "Tromsø in Norway, a member country of NATO."
- And again.
- In general, the career information is a little light but if that is all there is...
- Yes. The crew seems to have had a remarkably drama-free life.
Bibliography
- The translated title for Apalkov should be title case like the other titles listed.
- Done.
- For Friedman, just checking "Russian Federation and Successor States 1991–" is the accurate title, the end year isn't missing from the date range?
- Yes. That is the title.
- Polmar is listed but not cited
- I have re-added.
That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 09:42, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
- @Simongraham:, just checking you have seen the above comments? Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:17, 4 March 2022 (UTC)
- @Zawed: Thank you for the nudge! Please see my edits and comments above. simongraham (talk) 13:30, 4 March 2022 (UTC)
- This looks good, passing as GA now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 07:27, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
- @Zawed: Thank you for the nudge! Please see my edits and comments above. simongraham (talk) 13:30, 4 March 2022 (UTC)