Talk:Sudan women's national football team

Latest comment: 2 years ago by PCN02WPS in topic GA Reassessment
Former good articleSudan women's national football team was one of the Sports and recreation good articles, but it has been removed from the list. There are suggestions below for improving the article to meet the good article criteria. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
Did You Know Article milestones
DateProcessResult
June 9, 2012Good article nomineeNot listed
June 17, 2012Good article nomineeListed
August 24, 2022Good article reassessmentDelisted
Did You Know A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on April 29, 2012.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that while FIFA inquired about the creation of a Sudanese women's national football team, the Islamic Fiqh Council in Sudan issued a fatwa forbidding it?
Current status: Delisted good article

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Reviewer: Kaypoh (talk · contribs) 06:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

If team is unofficial, not recognised by FIFA, how to write broad article? No info on crest, supporters, stadium, maybe can ignore, but no info about the players? Sorry, fail. --Kaypoh (talk) 06:39, 9 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 07:45, 9 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this, starting Saturday June 9, 2012 (UTC -4.30) —Hahc21 [TALK][CONTRIBS] 07:45, 9 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

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Prose

The prose has many statements and affirmations that, aside from looking biased, are a little unnecesasary. I recommend rewording them or removing them.

The team
  • "In 1985, almost no country in the world had a women's national football team."
  • This seems better if moved into the other section.
  • "A Sudanese national team has never participated in a major regional and international event." >> "Sudanese national teams have never participated on neither regional nor international events." If both are negative, then and might be replaced with or.
  • "Between 1936 and May 2012, the team didn't played a single FIFA sanctioned game."
  • This phrase tells me that the team was stablished in 1936, which i think is not the purpose, right?
  • "In March 2012, a national team from the country didn't appear on the FIFA worldwide ranking,[7] and a national team did not officially exist."
  • We have a serious contradiction. This phrase says that a national team fro Sudan actually doesn't exist, but the article talks about such team.
  • Fixed first paragraph of the article to say "including Sudan. A FIFA recogised Sudanese national team has" which should clear up the contradiction between official FIFA recognised team and local, unrecognised national team playing in local club competitions. Also changed the first sentence of the last paragraph to say: "The national team continues to lack FIFA recognition. " which should solve the contradiction. --LauraHale (talk) 01:43, 10 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "Sudan is one of the only two Muslim countries in the region to have a women's league, which could be critical for the development of a national team."
  • This clarifies a bit and introduces the difference between national team and women's league. This needs to be clarified on the lead to avoid confusion of the reader.
  • "Sudan is one of the only two Muslim countries in the region to have a women's league, which could be critical for the development of a national team." >> "The fact that Sudan has a women's league could be critical for the development of a national team."
  • I haven't checked yet the refs. It would be better of you write an in-text attribution for this phrase, since its kind of being challenged.
  • "and played against a side from Sudan University that wore traditional garb."
  • And which is the tradditional garb?
  • "The quality of play was not high, as some players missed the ball when attempting to kick it."
  • I consider this is unecessary, since it gives too much information about an irrelevant point of the match.
  • For me, the important part is this was the unofficial national team's first match and the quality of play is very low. Did change to "The quality of play was not high and the game ended in a 2-0 win for the Challenge team." though. --LauraHale (talk) 01:34, 10 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "The national team remains unofficial."
  • Too many times it has been affirmed, no need to write it again =).

That's all by now =). Don't take my comments too harsh, it's not my intention (in case you felt them that way, i apologize). I'm just being kind of critical. if it will be a GA, it must be a good GA. I've made some minor fixes that i felt unworthy to write here. --—Hahc21 [TALK][CONTRIBS] 00:33, 10 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

No offense taken. :) I think I've addressed all the comments. --LauraHale (talk) 01:53, 10 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
comments from another
  • I just read the beginning but I have a few comments:
  • non-FIFA recognised - FIFA should be linked on first mention - perhaps spell it out the first time - e.g. is an unofficlal non Fédération Internationale de Football Association (FIFA)
  • "In 1985, almost no country in the world had a women's national football team" - In 1985, few countries had a women's national football team? "almost no" - what country or countries did? So this wasn't an Islamic or African problem but a worldwide problem?
    • World wide problem. Changed it to "In 1985, few countries in the world had a women's national football team". My recollection is the United States, England, Germany, Australia, Scotland. --LauraHale (talk) 21:27, 12 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "A FIFA recognised Sudanese national team has never participated in a major regional and international event." Does this mean that a national team was formed but never participated?
  • "While football was organised inside the country with 440 men's clubs in 2006,[18] and the first ever women's game being played that year in February between Tahadi and Sudan University at Sports’ City, Sudan University, development was hindered because a fatwa by the Fiqh Council of Islamic in 2006 condemning the creation of a women's league in Sudan."
  • "the first ever women's game being played that year" - the first women's game ever? or the first that year?
  • So a women's team existed in 2006 but it wasn't "national" or wasn't playing a "competitive match" until 2006?
  • And a fatwa (should be linked, explained) by Figh Council of Islamic (what is this) "hindered" its creation? Also, "hindered" but didn't prevent? How did it "hinder" and how did the team get around the hinderance?
  • Linked fatwa. Figh Council of Islamic is the ones issuing the fatwa. The text doesn't say much about who they are other than making it clear they are in influential religious body that says a national team cannot be created. I don't know how to describe them more. The unofficial team is not subject to it because they are not a FIFA team playing internationally and in the other cases, they appear to be ignoring it. --LauraHale (talk) 21:37, 12 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "country didn't appear" - contractions such as "didn't" isn't encyclopedic
  • did teams exist in Sudan and (and perhaps elsewhere) or were there no women playing on teams or in "competitive matches" until 2006 in the world, or in Africa only, or only countries affected by the Figh Coucil of Islamic?
  • Perhaps it would help to set the general context. Was this just a FIFA-related problem, or world wide no women played?
  • Which paragraph needs contextualising? In the background and development section, the first one clearly states African problems. The second paragraph is about Sudan. Third paragraph is about the national football association. --LauraHale (talk) 21:49, 12 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Sorry for being so confused!

MathewTownsend (talk) 19:24, 12 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

Verdict

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Ok, i think everything has been addressed. Since all information about the team is here, the criteria 3a and 3b are fulfilled. I doubt it'll be easy to find an image for the team, so 6a and 6b are met. 4a is met, since it's written with a NOPV. 2a, 2b and 2c are good. Everything is well-referenced, inline citations exist and no original research is fine. 1a convinces me, but i'm a little concerned about 1b, mainly the lead; but i think it meets that too. I'm passing the article.

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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Hahc21 17:10, 17 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

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Major update following developments since 2019

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I have updated and changed some of the former text, corresponding to the major changes since the Sudanese Revolution. Glad to see that some other editor also had included statistics and other information relating to the August 2021 Arab Women's Cup. - As the Sudanese women players haven't really had much experience and support before 2019, it is already a great step forward to participate in this tournament. - Just one minor remark: I don't see the necessity of redlinks for all the players' names, as there most probably won't be enough sources to support individual articles about each and every one of them. Maybe the editor who added these may reconsider? Munfarid1 (talk) 13:04, 28 August 2021 (UTC)Reply

GA Reassessment

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I will be reassessing this article to determine whether it still meets the Good Article criteria. Any user is encouraged to assist in improving the article to keep it up to GA standards. Thanks. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:08, 2 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. Some issues below.
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Lists and sections are not supposed to be empty, of course, though the "Records" section is mostly empty and orange-tagged as a result. There is an empty list within that section as well. I am also not convinced of the need for results tables for tournaments such as the World Cup, Olympics, African Games, Cup of Nations, and CECAFA Championship given Sudan has never qualified for any of them. Additionally the coaching staff should probably have their own section rather than just a subsection of the "Participation in international games"
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. Ref 11 is missing a language parameter, and Refs 13, 14, 18, 19, 22, 23, 24, and 27 do not work. Several other formatting issues could be cleared up.
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
  2c. it contains no original research. The sections "Records", "Competitive record, and "All−time record against FIFA recognized nations" all have no citations. "Coaching staff" only has a citation for the head coach, not for any of the assistants or for the "Manager history".
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. Team logo is fair use.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Team logo is relevant.
  7. Overall assessment.

Issues with criterion 1a

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History

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Participation in international games

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Players

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Records

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  • "Active players in bold, statistics correct as of 26 August 2021" → incorrect as no records are listed; also the "correct as of [date]" does not need bold
    Not incorrect if no players listed are active. — Bilorv (talk) 21:05, 26 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Competitive record

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All-time record against FIFA recognized nations

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See also

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  • No need to list things that aren't linked here, such as "Sudan women's national under-20 football team", "Sudan women's national under-17 football team", and "Women's football in Sudan"
    Removed, but this is unrelated to the GA criteria. — Bilorv (talk) 21:05, 26 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Overall review conclusion

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WP:GAR states that An individual assessment may be closed after seven days of no activity. As there has been no activity on the review for seven days, I am closing the review. My conclusion is that the article fails GA criteria 1a, 1b, 2a, and 2c at least, and therefore will be   delisted. If improvements are made in the future, and the article is brought up to par, it can be renominated for GA. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 20:47, 9 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Reassessment reopened

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Per discussion at WT:GAR, this reassessment is being reopened to give time for regular editors of the article to be notified about the reassessment and to address and discuss the issues raised in the review. It should remain open for at least two weeks. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:47, 26 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

I have done some reference work based on the comments on 2(a), but there's still more dead links and an unreliable IMDb source to deal with. However, criticisms about language parameters or formatting are irrelevant to the GA criteria. I've also responded to the copyediting comments, though some remain to be properly resolved. I'm the furthest thing from an expert on sports in Africa, but this doesn't read to me like a GA, so I see the initiation of this GAR as fundamentally valid (if not necessarily correct in every step). — Bilorv (talk) 21:05, 26 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
Not being able to update the calculations mentioned in the GAR, I just changed the statement about Sudan being "one of the few Muslim countries" with a women's league. Since Algeria, Egypt, Jordan, Mali, Morocco, Palestine, and Tunisia also have such leagues, I don't think the adjective "few" is appropriate and have changed the wording accordingly. - Thanks to Bilorv (talk), most of the other issues are fixed now, but I also have my doubts about this being a GA. (When it was first given this status, it was even much more deficient...) - And as I mentioned earlier, most of the redlinks should be removed, as these names will most probably never receive international notability. Munfarid1 (talk) 10:13, 28 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
Just wanted to add Iraq, Jordan, Syria, the UAE, Saudi Arabia and Lebanon (if you consider it Muslim) to the list of leagues. Nehme1499 13:11, 28 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
If you have a source for the other Muslim countries you mentioned, you can of course include them into the list. I have doubts about UAE and Saudi Arabia though. - Only Lebanon does not qualify as a Muslim country, despite the majority of its inhabitants being Muslim. But I am sure, the Christian and non-denominational character of Lebanon would not allow this generalization. Besides, the list is long enough to prove that women's teams are not really few... Munfarid1 (talk) 07:26, 29 July 2022 (UTC)Reply

Comments by Nehme1499

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  • A few comments:
Since its official recognition in 2019, Sudan is among other Muslim countries in the Arab and African region to have a women's league: I don't get this sentence. It's like saying that Italy is among other European countries to have a women's league. What's so notable about that? As far as I can tell, the majority of Muslim / Arab countries have a women's league.
In 2021, the Women's Africa Cup of Nations (WAFCON) included Muslim countries, such as Algeria, Egypt, Jordan, Mali, Morocco, Palestine, and Tunisia that also had national teams: (1) Jordan and Palestine do not compete in the WAFCON, rather in the AFC Women's Asian Cup; (2) "that also had national teams" seems redundant. If a country (Algeria, Egypt, ...) is competing at the WAFCON, it's logical that they would have a national team.
In general, I would not put any focus on the fact that Sudan is an Arab or Muslim country with a national team and domestic women's league, as it's not a rarity. See the WAFF Women's Clubs Championship: the UAE, Palestine, Bahrain, Lebanon, Jordan, Iraq and Syria all sent their domestic league champions to compete. Jordanian club Amman SC also won the 2021 AFC Women's Club Championship. As far as I know, all countries in the Arab world have a women's national team. Even the Saudi NT made its debut a few months ago, and have a women's football league since 2020. Nehme1499 16:45, 29 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
I agree with your logic and examples, but many readers might not be aware of women's football teams in these countries. Stereotypical attitudes towards women playing serious football in general and in Muslim countries still prevail, so it is notable for the article in my view. Munfarid1 (talk) 22:00, 29 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
The fact of the matter is that we are not here to WP:RIGHTGREATWRONGS. Whatever the public perception is on Muslim/Arab countries has no bearing on what we should write. The fact is that all Arab countries have women's national teams, and most of them have domestic leagues. It's counterproductive to write that Sudan is special because it's a Muslim country with a women's NT, when all other Muslim countries have one as well. It highlights something that is not necessary to highlight imo. Nehme1499 00:02, 30 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
Following the suggestions above, I have deleted the mention of Sudan being a Muslim country with specific problems for women in sports. Also, I have done some copyedits and mentioned the double membership of Sudan's national teams both in CAF and the Arab League. It would be great, if any other ideas to improve this article could be entered directly into the text, as I don't really feel competent for matters of football in general. Munfarid1 (talk) 13:12, 31 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • Another point: given that the huge majority of the prose is regarding women's football in Sudan, rather than specifically the national team, I would move the content there. A summary should of course be kept here, but the main part should be forked out (similarly to how we have women's football in Italy or women's football in Lebanon). I believe that the best solution is to delist this article as GA (since the national team has not even been active for a year, so there is not so much content), and try to improve the new women's football in Sudan article, hopefully to GA standards.
Realistically, this approach should also be applied to the plethora of (mainly African) women's national football team GAs being listed for reassessment. Most of the prose in those articles talks about the background and the development of women's football in the country as a whole, not specifically about the national team per se. Nehme1499 13:33, 31 July 2022 (UTC)Reply
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