Talk:Temper (film)

Semi-protected edit request on 1 March 2015

Please change the content of the Plot from

"Daya is an orphan who grows up learning that a police's life is a happy one with lots of money coming in the form of bribes which inspires him to become a police officer. After years, he becomes a corrupt, cunning, manipulative and ruthless sub inspector of police. He is transferred to Vishakhapatnam where he forms an immediate friendship with the local don Waltair Vasu by releasing his four brothers Ravi, Mani, Varun and Sundeep from the jail who were arrested for smuggling. Daya's attitude does not go well with his subordinate Narayana Murthy, a sincere police constable. He tries to oppose Daya's deeds which go vain.

Meanwhile Daya meets a pet cross member Shanvi and falls in love with her at first sight. With the help of two chain snatchers, Daya manages to steal her pet dogs which are very precious for her. Daya later manages to pose those chain snatchers as police constables and adds that they had to fight with Korean smugglers to retrieve those dogs. He also foils her marriage with a flutist named Vennela Kishore by arresting him at a brothel house adding that he is an ardent dog lover and an exact opposite of Kishore which makes Shanvi fall for him. On her birthday, Vasu's men kidnap her and Daya rescues her in time. Vasu then scolds his henchmen for kidnapping the wrong person and apologises to both of them.

As her birthday gift, Shanvi asks Daya to save that girl's life who was supposed to be kidnapped and killed by Vasu. Obliging the same, Daya saves that girl named Lakshmi and opposes Vasu. They later reconcile and Daya comes to know that Lakshmi has a proof of Vasu's brothers' atrocities which if exposed can kill them. Daya meets Lakshmi and comes to know that Deepthi was her sister who was kidnapped, raped, and brutally assaulted to death by Vasu's four brothers for 40 days and the same was recorded by them. That was stored in a CD which is with Lakshmi now. Daya takes the CD and sends Lakshmi and her mother to United States.

Before leaving, Lakshmi's conversation with him bring a change in his mindset and turns an honest officer after a chain of events with Murthy notifying the change in him. Daya credits Shanvi for bringing the change in him and reveals the truth to her after which she forgives him. After Deepthi's dead body is found and postmortemed by a female doctor, Daya produces the CD as the evidence which turns out to be an empty one. Though no further evidence exists, Daya asks a gap of one day to provide necessary evidence so that Vasu's brothers should not escape as exonerated. He regrets for not making multiple copies of the CD in a conversation with Shanvi and later, Vasu's men attack Daya when he is alone.

He reaches the court next day and adds that he is also one among the 'five' men who sexually assaulted Deepthi and convinces the judge to put five of them to death so that those four shall not escape death. In the last minute, Lakshmi reveals Murthy that she has an extra copy and the same is aired in the media. Daya's death sentence gets cancelled while the remaining four die in the jail, three in the hands of Daya and the remaining one after being hanged. Daya is reinstated into service and he reconciles with Shanvi and Murthy in the end."

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"It is the journey of a cop named Daya (Jr NTR). The story revolves around how a street smart cunning Daya becomes more human and socially responsible."

75.189.157.67 (talk) 21:05, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Not done: Why would you want to delete the entire plot? We don't hide spoilers, per our spoiler guidelines. Stickee (talk) 01:50, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Temper (film)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 18:01, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

Hi, I should have this to you by tomorrow ☩JAGUAR ☩ 18:01, 29 April 2015 (UTC)

Two quick questions: is there any source that describes this film as an action thriller? If not, I think the genre can simply be action. And the poster, is that the final/most common one? Kailash29792 (talk) 08:33, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

@Kailash29792: The first has been altered to "action film" as its director quotes the same in an interview. And, about the poster, it is the last theatrical release poster and also, i find no need to use a poster featuring Daya (NTR) as a police or with a gun or a police jeep, as the character never takes its profession seriously till the pre climax. Then too, it wears the uniform for only one sequence in the end, for seconds literally. Thus, i felt that i could use a poster featuring both the leads when available. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:47, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

• "by leveraging his capacity as a police and an influential smuggler" - doesn't make sense here, how about as a officer or official?

Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "and an honest constable Murthy in the transition of Daya to a sincere police officer" - again this sounds a bit unclear, is Murthy helping Daya in any way or is he helping him become a sincere police officer?

The latter. Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• The release dates should typically be in the first paragraph of the lead and not the last, however the lead does not mention anything about what critics thought of it, so if you could expand the last paragraph (by writing more about its reception) then I think this should be OK

Well, i believed the release and reception should be in the same, last paragraph after observing many other GA and FA articles. Even its flow from the second paragraph adheres with the article's structure — the concept, production (other than casting which is mentioned in the first mandatorily), release and reception. I've added about its reception in the lead and it should be okay now. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "They later reconcile and Daya comes to know that Lakshmi has a proof" - no need for "a"

Removed. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "That was stored in a CD which is with Lakshmi now" - on a CD

Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "Few stills of the film were leaked online on November 26" - A few still images or "screenshots" might sound more like it? Also, the date format in this sentence is inconsistent with the rest of the article

Rephrased. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "In mid-May 2014, The film's shooting schedules were planned in July 2014" - capital letter here. Also is there any reason why the shooting was pushed back to August?

No idea why it happened. May be a delay in Pre production? I don't know sadly. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "because of disruption in construction of a big police station set because of rains" - would sound better as because of disruption in construction of a large police station set due to rainfall

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 10:51, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• The Music section would benefit from either being expanded slightly or merged, seeing as the Temper (soundtrack) article is quite large you could shift content from there?

Expanded slightly. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "screening rights of the film in entire Europe except United Kingdom" - I would lose entire and reword it to "the United Kingdom". It's mentioned again in the next sentence

Removed entire. Altered the next sentence and i believe it should be okay now. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• "other parts of North India and International markets" - international doesn't need to be capitalised

Done. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

• Minor, but I noticed some spelling inconsistencies throughout the article (some sections use American English while the rest uses Indian/British English), it won't affact the GA criteria but I can use a script to correct it if you like?

Please do it. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 11:02, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

References

• The toolserver is currently down so I had to check the references manually and found no problems

On hold

This is a thoroughly researched article and is comprehensive which is a good factor for this becoming GA. I noticed a few prose issues that could be addressed without any problems and also the lead could be better organised/summarised. I'll put this on hold until all of the above can be addressed, but please ask me if you have any questions! JAGUAR  10:33, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

Close - promoted

Thank you for the quick improvements, I'm confident that the article now meets the GA criteria thanks for the changes made. The prose is now generally much cleaner and references all check out. Well done! JAGUAR  12:57, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

@Jaguar: Thanks for reviewing the article! Pavanjandhyala (talk) 13:10, 1 May 2015 (UTC)

Semi-protected edit request on 12 May 2015

Please add actor Junaid Sheikh in the supporting cast. Elemastr (talk) 18:09, 12 May 2015 (UTC)

 Done Pavanjandhyala (talk) 02:14, 13 May 2015 (UTC)

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