Talk:There Comes Papa

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:There Comes Papa/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Qono (talk · contribs) 00:01, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	"The cultural creation of a new morality..." is unclear. See below. Resolved.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Given that coverage on this painting is not easy to find, it's hard to say if this covers the main topics. I think it would be nice to know a little more about the production of the painting, how this fits into the artist's oeuvre, and where it is currently held. With this, it would pass this criteria, but without it, I'm uncertain. Given that this is my first GA review, I'm going to ask for a second opinion. Resolved.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

I'm looking forward to reviewing this article! Qono (talk) 00:01, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

Background

"The cultural creation of a new morality, coupled in addition to legal infringements, required a redefinition of the once polyandrous and matrilocal system of kinship."

This sentence is unclear. If this remains true to the intended meaning, perhaps rewrite as:

"Due to shifting morals and newly passed laws, the once polyandrous and matrilocal system of kinship were redefined."

Qono (talk) 00:27, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

GA corrections

@Qono: Thank you for reviewing the article. Does the corrected revision look good? BBuddy (talk) 15:15, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

@BreadBuddy: Looks good, but I'm going to ask for a second opinion on 3a. Qono (talk) 21:59, 18 December 2018 (UTC)

@Qono: I've addressed your concern for 3a and expanded some more on the techniques that the artist used and more on the exhibition (including where it is currently held). I can add more on anything else, but I am careful not to go off topic. Can you give it a look if possible?BBuddy (talk) 19:11, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

@BreadBuddy: With these changes, I think this passes the criteria. Thank you! Qono (talk) 21:01, 19 December 2018 (UTC)

@Qono: Thank you for taking the time to review, I really appreciate it! BBuddy (talk) 21:04, 19 December 2018 (UTC)