Template:Did you know nominations/Amdavad ni Gufa

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The result was: promoted by — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:50, 19 December 2012 (UTC)

Amdavad ni Gufa

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... that Amdavad ni Gufa (pictured), a cave-like underground art gallery in Ahmedabad designed by B. V. Doshi, exhibits works of M F Hussain?

Reviewed: Tarsar Lake
Comment: Article created on December 6, 2012.

Created by Nizil Shah (talk). Self nom at 12:28, 6 December 2012 (UTC)

Length, date, hook checks out. Nice photo. Good to go. --Soman (talk) 23:36, 8 December 2012 (UTC)

While I think this is a fascinating structure and would like to see the article as a lead hook, I think this needs a major copyedit before it can be turned loose on the main page. For example, take the sentence "Buddhist caves of Ajanta and Ellora inspired him for interior made of circles and ellipses while Paleolithic cave art inspired for paintings on walls." It is not complete, there is no referent for "him", and is otherwise problematic. There are similar issues throughout. BlueMoonset (talk) 19:32, 12 December 2012 (UTC)

I reviewed whole article again and fixed all such sentences. Have a look and tell me if it further need any improvement. Regards. --Nizil (talk) 21:37, 12 December 2012 (UTC)

Nizil Shah, unfortunately, there are still significant problems with the prose. While the problematic sentence I mentioned above has improved, it is still far from ideal, and many others need even more work: you have not, unfortunately, "fixed all such sentences". I strongly recommend you get another person to do the copyediting. As it stands, it is still a ways from being ready for the main page. In addition, there are some close paraphrasing issues; examples include "It was built on the basis of computer aided designs" in the article as opposed to "gallery has been built on the basis of computer aided designs" in the source, and the article's "It was constructed by using simple hand tools by unskilled tribal labourers" as opposed to the source's "structure has been constructed using simple hand tools and that too by unskilled workers". BlueMoonset (talk) 03:58, 15 December 2012 (UTC)

Yes, may be I am not so good at english. I will demand help from somebody else for copyediting. I will remove all paraphrases and add new sentences. Regards. --Nizil (talk) 10:19, 18 December 2012 (UTC)

copyediting done by User:Ipigott as recommended. Paraphrases removed. Is it OK? --Nizil (talk) 19:49, 18 December 2012 (UTC)

Issues with prose and close paraphrasing have been nicely resolved by recent edits; restoring approval. As noted earlier, length, date, and hook sourcing are fine. Recommend this as a lead hook, since I can no longer promote it myself. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:43, 18 December 2012 (UTC)

I've done some copy editing too, and I've found this to be a very well made article with a nice picture that will make a great DYK. --BDD (talk) 22:41, 19 December 2012 (UTC)