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The result was: promoted by  — Crisco 1492 (talk) 11:35, 31 December 2012 (UTC)

Right Now (Rihanna song)

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Created/expanded by Tomica (talk), Calvin999 (talk). Nominated by Tomica (talk) at 22:30, 27 November 2012 (UTC)

  • You have to be joking. Did you even check the hook source? First, while the article correctly reproduces the Koski quote, which is "pushes its heady, anthemic hook a little too far into seizure-inducing territory", it does so in a sentence that is incorrect: the lead in and the quote (starting at "heady") do not make a complete sentence, which should have prompted a correction request on the spot, since it doesn't make sense as written. Further, the article says "hook", not "instrumental": musical hooks are more frequently vocal rather instrumental (check hook (music)), and neither source nor article make clear which it is, though "anthemic" would tend to indicate there are words involved. And it's far from clear to me that Koski is claiming an actual physical seizure is possible. The hook clearly needs to be revised, and that problematic sentence in the article needs fixing. Once that happens, a complete re-review by someone else will need to be performed. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:03, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Hook is not very interesting, but worse, the article has not been fixed. This cannot proceed until that is done. BlueMoonset (talk) 17:24, 14 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Sorry, but what should I actually fix? I don't understand your comment, can you please clarify? Thanks. — Tomíca(T2ME) 17:42, 14 December 2012 (UTC)
  • As I noted in my initial comment, the Kolski sentence in the article is not a complete sentence. It needs to make sense, and it doesn't now. I don't see how I can say it any clearer than that: either fix it or delete it, but it can't stay as it is. BlueMoonset (talk) 21:55, 14 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Why are you talking about the original hook when ALT1 has now been provided? There's nothing wrong with ALT1, it's just your personal opinion. AARON• TALK 21:28, 20 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Because the Koski sentence in the article did not make sense as written. Since neither of you were able to fix it, I've done so by pulling the quote, which isn't needed now that you're not pursuing the original hook, which I have struck. Incidentally, as a reviewer, my opinion was indeed that ALT1 wasn't very interesting—"interesting" being one of the primary criteria for DYK—but I'll let the new reviewer decide the issue. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:07, 21 December 2012 (UTC)
  • New independent reviewer needed; ALT1 needs to be checked, including whether it is interesting (as required by DYK). BlueMoonset (talk) 00:07, 21 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Article is new enough and long enough. The above comments have been attended to. Going with ALT1. (Though the hook is not specially interesting, I cannot see anything else in the article that would provide a better hook.) Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:43, 29 December 2012 (UTC)
  • The recently added paragraph at the end of the Background and production section needs either to be sourced or eliminated; per DYK rules all paragraphs in the body need at least one inline source. I don't care which is done; one must be. BlueMoonset (talk) 15:02, 29 December 2012 (UTC)
  • I don't know who added it actually. I removed it now. — Tomíca(T2ME) 16:57, 29 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks. Approval restored per review by Cwmhiraeth. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:59, 29 December 2012 (UTC)
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