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List of Padma Bhushan award recipients (1960–69)

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Nominator(s): §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 06:45, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured list because it majorly seems to fit the criteria and with comments from other editors it can easily pass. The list is based on the current FL List of Padma Bhushan award recipients (1954–59). Looking forward for constructive comments. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 06:45, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Yash!
*I am just taking a minor issue with the huge empty space which is present in 1960. It is more for technical editing but please make sure that it is not there.
Tried rearranging the graphs and images. Please check now.
  • A question. What is more appropriate to mention? Svetoslav Roerich, a citizen of Russia or Soviet Union?
The official source says Russia and hence its noted likewise. Similar case is with 1991's Padma Shri winner Madan Lal Madhu.
  • IMO, better to write "United States" instead of "USA".
Done.
  • Some of the refs could use the additional field of "publisher".
Done.
  • The caption for Asaf Ali Asghar Fyzee could be better phrased.
Done.
  • Link Operation Flood or White Revolution.
Done.
  • "his group of businesses were amongst the top 30 business in 1939" - top 30 as in? Better to use something else to describe if the "top 30" is not an official or widely used term.
Done. Caption changed.
  • There is a space before a full stop in Lata Mangeshkar's caption.
Done.
  • Though it is not a strict requirement, three or four more pictures to cover the empty space till the references begin would look nice.
Done. Added few more images. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 09:35, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I will have a go at the prose later. Thanks. Yash! 18:50, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Yash! §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 06:07, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support as a list that serves the project quite well. Schmidt, Michael Q. 17:43, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
    • I hope this doesn't mean anything, but I noticed that this one-line support was preceded by a review request on the reviewer's talk page that ended with a winking face. With reports of talk page spamming at another FLC, can we please refrain from symbols like that, which may lead sketical outsiders to presume canvassing? It just doesn't look good, even though I don't believe that was the intention. Giants2008 (Talk) 02:08, 6 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Ohhh! Didn't think that it could be interpreted as canvassing. The wink was only for the play of words and the popular film's title The Usual Suspects. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 04:12, 6 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Vivvt
Resolved comments from - Vivvt (Talk) 09:42, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
*No need to hyphenate third-highest.
  • Ref 6 should be placed at the end of the sentence.
  • "Sitar maestro" --> "Sitar player"
- Vivvt (Talk) 13:19, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Vivvt: Have incorporated all your comments. Thanks! §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 18:06, 12 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Vivvt (Talk) 09:42, 17 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Comments from Nvvchar
  • This sentence "It is ranked fifth in the order of precedence of wearing of medals and decorations." could probably be qualified.
Sorry @Nvvchar:! I didn't understand your comment. What do you mean by "could be qualified"?
Done @Nvvchar:. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 05:28, 21 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Red link names for which there no WP articles so that some one else can write these articles.
Red links were asked to be avoided at the 1954-59 FLC. I have noticed that Tachs is doing a good job of writing articles on many of them and then linking them here.
  • Consider putting all the imgs in a gallery, though they have been fitted before the tables to the right in the FLC list approved for 1950-59.
We have been following similar format on many other FLs, not just Padma, where images of all/majority of the individuals are not present.

Even without these changes the list is supported for approval.Nvvchar. 14:32, 18 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Comments from Cartoon network freak
Resolved comments from Cartoon network freak (talk)
Hi there! I took a look at your article and here are my comments. Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:37, 10 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
  • Ref#2 should be placed after the second sentence.
  • The Gazette of India—a publication... -> The Gazette of India, a publication...
  • in the Gazette. -> in the journal
  • are also registered... -> are as well archived
  • Padma Vibhushan awards; preceded by the Bharat Ratna. -> reword; the semicolon sentence doesn't make any sense.
  • The same with the following clause.
  • posthumous awards but this was subsequently... -> posthumous awards; this was subsequently...
  • design is a -> design portrays a
  • were presented in the 1960s – ten... -> were presented in the 1960s – ten...
  • 1960 followed... -> 1960, followed...
  • Remove the semicolons and add a simple comma instead; e.g. I'm afraid you're struggle with the use of semicolons. You use them only to connect two sentences together, like "The song peaked at number five in UK; it was also certified Gold in the US".
  • The lead overall features poor grammar, on which I'm going to comment detailed the following week, as I currently have no time.
Explanatory notes
  • Rename the section into simply "notes".
External links
  • Awards & Medals -> Awards and medals

@Dharmadhyaksha More comments to come in the course of the next week... Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:37, 10 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Have incorporated all your comments. Thanks! Waiting for more... §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 17:57, 10 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Dharmadhyaksha: I'm very sorry for my absence, I will give comments for the lead tomorrow; the wikitables and other overall looks OK! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:24, 19 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • receive a Sanad (certificate) signed by the President of India -> receive a Sanad, a certificate signed by the President of India
  • medallion with no monetary grant associated with the award -> medallion with no monetary association.
  • Publication, Ministry of Urban Development used -> Publication, Ministry of Urban Development, used
  • in the Gazette -> in the journal
  • from the register.[4] None of the conferments of Padma Bhushan during 1960–69 have been revoked or restored. -> from the register;[4] none of the conferments of Padma Bhushan during 1960–69 have been revoked or restored.
  • union territory governments, the Ministries -> union territory governments, with the Ministries
  • classified as "Dusra Warg" (Class II) under the three-tier -> classified as a "Dusra Warg", a class-two award under the three-tier
  • awards; preceded -> awards, which were
  • includes -> included
  • Government servants" but -> Government servants", but
  • modified in -> modified for
  • was also modified -> was also changed
  • that is currently in use. The current design portrays -> that is currently in use; it portrays
  • you use the word "embossed" too often; try to adjust this
  • and the text "Padma" written in Devanagari script is placed above and the text "Bhushan" is placed below the lotus. -> and the award's title, written in Devanagari script, is placed below the lotus.
  • The Emblem of India is placed -> The Emblem of India is displayed
  • reverse side with the -> reverse side, together with the
  • India, "Satyameva Jayate" -> India, "Satyameva Jayate",
  • Script, inscribed -> Script, which is inscribed
  • in 1960 followed -> in 1960, followed
  • were awarded which -> were awarded, which
  • sports-persons -> sports persons
  • award and Sitar -> award, while Sitar
  • accept it stating -> accept it, with him stating
@Dharmadhyaksha: These are my final comments before my support. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:53, 20 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Cartoon network freak: Incorporated all your comments. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 05:28, 21 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks CNF for your comments. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 06:14, 22 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Pavanjandhyala: Have rephrased and trimmed the sentence. Thanks for the comment. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 11:57, 23 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support A very well done list. The reference number 5 for Note (a) regarding the order of precedence could be updated to the latest No. 106-Pres/2004 notification that supersedes No. 75-Pres/2001 linked to the Indian Army website. The latest one can be found here. Does not change anything, purely cosmetic. The Masked Man of Mega Might (talk) 20:05, 4 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks @The Masked Man of Mega Might: Have replaced with the link you provided. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 06:58, 5 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Source review

All appears to be good (after I made two minor tweaks) - SchroCat (talk) 07:30, 13 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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